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PostSubject: poetry that deserves no title......   4/1/2009, 1:36 am

beautiful meaningless words......
like a soft caress.... sweetly
whispered....


BANG! BANG!


Shot down.....by the bullet of destruction...
lies and bullshit......
seeping in....like a predator stalking its prey.

pulling me under....
down down into the deep abyss
that leads nowhere, but my heart.....

my heart cant breathe...

no air....


gasping for the right words...
words to make you not leave....
to not walk away..

but you really got it good dontcha?

feeding me bull...
blinded by the light......immune to ur shit..
your lies...

but thats all over now honey...

i have a weapon....
something so powerful you can
never take it away...



my pride
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PostSubject: Re: poetry that deserves no title......   4/2/2009, 7:49 am

I think that this is my favorite of what you've posted thus far. I think that it has the strongest impact, and a powerful closing. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
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PostSubject: Re: poetry that deserves no title......   4/2/2009, 7:59 am

thanks lol i couldnt think of a title i was sitting in creative writing and couldnt think of a title so i put that as my title Very Happy i have more i will put up soon
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PostSubject: Re: poetry that deserves no title......   4/2/2009, 8:06 am

Sounds good. I rather like the title, almost like he isn't even worth naming, like giving him a title would show some kind of respect, respect that he doesn't deserve.
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