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PostSubject: Uzumaki -- Ian Disch   Uzumaki -- Ian Disch I_icon_minitime3/27/2009, 8:13 am

Uzumaki

The young boy stands behind the door and watches,
Hidden in the shadows, eyes wide, mind a funnel,
As he sees the shadows interact,
One coming down on the other over
And over.

The teen loiters in the high school bathroom,
Taking another slow toke on his joint,
Letting the numbness flush through his body,
Looking down at the motionless body of the student
Whose only crime was:
Existence.

The businessman lets a slow grin spread across
His face as he calls in yet another peon.
The THC still lingers, dulling his pain,
Letting him focus on cutting down
His subordinate, using his tongue
Like a scythe on reaping day.

The husband comes home to his wife,
Only to find that there was nothing
For dinner, on television, in the paper,
And his child, peering around the corner,
Watches the shadows,
Until one lies, motionless,
On the floor.


-Ian Disch
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PostSubject: Re: Uzumaki -- Ian Disch   Uzumaki -- Ian Disch I_icon_minitime3/29/2009, 9:27 am

I like this. Uzumaki means spiral right? Is this all the same person? I can't remember if you said that or not...boy, teen, man, husband...spirals to the next generation??? I may be interpreting incorrectly...but I like it!

thanks.

Is anyone else on here yet? I hope people start posting!!
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PostSubject: Re: Uzumaki -- Ian Disch   Uzumaki -- Ian Disch I_icon_minitime3/29/2009, 4:42 pm

Yes, Uzumaki does mean spiral. The idea was that the boy in the first stanza grows to become the teen, the man, and the husband, at which point it "spirals" to the next generation, his son seeing what he saw himself as a child. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And no, no one else is on here yet, you should help encourage more people to come. I think this would be a great way for people to stay in touch and share work even after the semester ends.
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